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Purika
Dec 10, 2016 22:26:21 GMT -5
Post by Retasu on Dec 10, 2016 22:26:21 GMT -5
I think where you're trying to go with this character is great, however there are just a few things I think that needs to be changed in regards to where Duri lives.
If he was raised in the Central Wastes, one would find that very little life is sustained out there. I wouldn't think it'd be possible to find a lake or two around those parts. Also, the Central Wastes tends to be a meeting point for a lot of the North vs South battles that have happened, so that has taken it's toll on the area. More than just a few angry reptiles would mess up someone's day.
Perhaps have them either living more along the Northern or Southern borders, rather than smack dab right in the middle. They could still be a village that is not aligned with either side, but are in an area that can sustain life a bit better.
OR, if they do live in the wastes perhaps he and his village go hunting within the Northern and Southern territories which prove to be able to have a bit more too it than the war tattered central area of the planet.
Keep in mind, Daikondu has been at war with itself for 100's of years. Anyone not aligned with either Empire is surely feeling the effects of the war, and is susceptible to being seen as traitors by either side.
Once you fix that up throw me a tag and I'll look it over.
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Purika
Low Class Poster
Posts: 4
Race: Saiyajin
Dice: 3d20
EXP: 0
Zeni: 100
HP: 15
SP: 213
Transformations: Oozaru
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Purika
Dec 11, 2016 17:07:13 GMT -5
Post by Purika on Dec 11, 2016 17:07:13 GMT -5
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Purika
Dec 14, 2016 21:11:48 GMT -5
Post by Retasu on Dec 14, 2016 21:11:48 GMT -5
Accepted.
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Adding your stats and complimentary items now.
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